FightingSeraph's movie Reviews on Newgrounds

[-In Response-]

Incomplete, but well-written.

In spite of the incomplete animation and crappy sound quality, this is one of the better written flash movies around. What's even more surprising that this is from a member of the Lock Legion. I'm not going to let the Clock/Lock deal affect your score because I don't mind the Clock Crew or the Lock Legion as long as they produce good material and annoy the shit out of others. With that out of the way...

In terms of graphics, you are obviously in need of a few books on anatomy and animation. While the characters are better-drawn than what Rhete, Jerry Jackson, or Doug Sauncy (the Keegan's Truck guy); I think you could improve on your proportions a bit and the incomplete animation prevent this from getting a ten from me. In terms of sound, I like the songs from the Audio Portal you chose, which set a fitting mood I might add. Plus, the voice acting is great. However, I have to agree with Sir Davey (who happens to be a personal favorite of mine) on the sound quality. In terms of content, this is how an original cartoon on here should be done. You have a solid script and great diolog, unlike many high-rated cartoons which have above-average to excellent graphics, but lackluster to lame story, sub-par to inept directing, and weak diolog. If you go back and finish up the actual graphics and animation, you'll be set for greatness.

What I do like:
-Great script
-Great voice acting
-Good sound selection
-Original
-Respectable direction

What I don't like:
-Unfinished animation
-The sound quality on the voices needs improvement.

Overall: I see much potential from you as a writer, but your drawing and animation skills are in need of work. Here's an eight out of ten for what you have so far.

[Now or Never]

I really like this!

I noticed that you are mostly known for pixel art, but this is pretty badass! Were the graphics outside of the photos imported or drawn directly in flash? With that out of the way...

In terms of graphics, I really like the pixel art approach that you took with this. And you did a great job with the direction and the timing as well. However, it could have used a bit more animation in parts, namely the silhouettes of various people crossing the street. As for the music, even though no audio portal music was used; you did a great job on the selection and the translation is passable. As for the characters, I think they're both cute and awesome at the same time, although Saturn's gender might cause some confusion at first.

What I do like:
-Excellent art
-Great direction and timing
-Top-notch sound selection
-Original

What I don't like:
-Could have used more animation in parts, but the directing makes up for that.

Overall: Rokkan-Saturn, how would you like a nine out of ten?

[These Are My Favorite]

That was pretty creative!

I really like how you mixed David Firth's music with a style reminiscent of Neil Freebairn's To Kill An Assassin (you should check that out when you get the chance). It's too bad that a lot of people missed out on checking this out, because this is one of the better music videos around. With that said...

In terms of art and animation, it's similar to To Kill An Assassin, but with much more in terms of actual animation. Speaking of which, I like it when people mix tweening and frame-by-frame together, and you did a great job at it. Plus, I liked how you synchronized the animation to David Firth's music. As for that part, you have made a wise choice when it came to Audio Portal music, something different outside of the metal and electronica (which I happen to like I might add). As much as I loved watching Katan, Bitey of Brackenwood, Tankmen: Dual, Serpent's Grave, and Fallen Angel; this is kinda reminiscent of the flash cartoons that were made between 2000-2003 when people on here were doing flash for the hell of it.

What I do like:
-Nice animation
-Original, which isn't as important as the final product
-Excellent timing
-Good song selection

What I don't like:
-The speed of the faces at the preloader was near blinding.

Overall: Here's a nine out of ten for doing something that I found quite enjoyable.

[Lady Noir]

Solid animation, good tone, but a bit disjointed.

While it may be nice that this collab isn't either a music video or a Robot Chicken wanna-be; I still have a few gripes with this. Of course, you guys will hate me for saying this, but just be glad I'm not giving a low score. (I'm not like that overrated, directorially inept prick Notorious.) With that out of the way...

Graphically, it's better than the Star Syndicate's Night in Hotlanta, but the styles used didn't complement each other, which resulted in this losing three points. However, the individual shorts were coherent and had a decent choice of angles. On the other hand, the pacing was uneven for the first one, but I'll let it slide for it actually worked. Soundwise, the music you chose was fitting, even though I usually don't like Hania Lee's music. (Keep in mind that I happened to like Popstar.) As for the voicework, not bad, but I think there are better VAs that you could have used such as Sam Haft, Larry McKee (Mega Man & Pompous Robots), Psyguy, Ry-Guy, or Nick Tiner. (Note to Sapphire: I think that your review would have been more valid if you responded to some of the critics.) However, the voice deliveries were passable, so I'm not going to complain about that. Then there's the story, which fell apart after Denzel Crocker's part. I'd like to see something more creative than the overused "big bad businessman" trope. Then again, I like how the first part was handled.

What I do like:
-Good art and animation
-Good music selection
-Something different
-Good directing on the first two parts

What I don't like:
-Lack of uniformity/style clash
-The voice acting, while not bad, could have been better.
-The second two parts were rather weak in the story department. Of course, as much as I liked Denzel's part, it didn't have much of a plot.

Overall: A prime example of how the sum of all parts doesn't hold up well as a whole. Here's a seven out of ten for trying.

[Burning Gundam v.s Barney]

3D modeled excellence!

Chakra-X, for your first 3D cartoon, this is much better than most people's attempts at a complete one. Of course, I tried modeling in GMax, but I didn't like it very much. With that out of the way, on with the review...

Graphically speaking, this is better than most 3D flash movies where it's either good models ruined by bad animation (Battle for the Portal) or the other way around (Rick's Adventure 171-Symphony Battle). This had both great models and the animation was up to par with those models. Plus, I like how you included the special attack for the Burning Gundam. Keep in mind that I have never seen a Gundam episode ever, although I did see a few snippets on YouTube. Speaking of which, why is it that there is always some dumbass who says that video files don't belong here? Truth is, I think video submissions should be treated the same way as regular Flash entries. As for the sound, excellent choice of music, and I also like how you used Barney and Mark Gatha soundbytes. I think that time you spent on personal projects has paid off. Why? Because I found this to be pretty damned funny!

What I do like:
-Great models and animation
-Fitting sound
-Funny

What I don't like:
-People will complain about the length, but screw what they think.

Overall: How would you like a ten for this?

Chakra-X responds:

Thank you very much sir! I have not seen those flashes in awhile so I would like to take a look at them. I did have fun building the Gundam and Barney, but my professor told me there a lot more good modelers than good 3D animators out there, so I really wanted to make that look good. THANK you for appreciating what I did to try to replicate the greatness of the Burning Gundam. I understand this is a flash-based site, but flash and video have been blending together ever since YouTube came around. It's not like it was live action.

Also, the original requirements for the project were to be 15-30 seconds long, so in that context my animation of *long*!

Thank you for this review!

[Stuck!]

Pretty good.

Even though I think that you are an asshole, this cartoon proves that you can create good, original material (emphasis on the "good" part). With that out of the way...

Graphically, it isn't the best, but it gets the point across, which is the way it ought to be on here. Nice mix between tweening and frame-by-frame. Plus, I think you did a good job on the music selection. However, this wasn't funny which resulted in you losing two points.

What I do like:
-Good art and animation
-Original, which matters little especially if the final product turns out to suck.
-Nice music selection
-Nice pace

What I don't like:
-Wasn't funny
-Sound effects were a bit grating
-Artistic value is no excuse for not having a replay button. Then again, I can always right click and replay it that way.

Overall: I may like this, but that won't change my opinion of you. Here's an eight out of ten.

CoolDrMoney responds:

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[Tankmen:Dual part 2]

This puts Tankmen Infinity to shame!

Johnathan, you just put the Zirbes brothers to shame with this, and it's too bad that you're not going to submit any future projects here from what I've heard. (I have a hunch that they'll do pretty well here.) Enough of that, on with the review...

In terms of art and animation, it's the same as your other Tankmen cartoons: good animation, nice style, and your direction would put a shitload of people to shame, both amateur (examples: Notorious, Legendary Frog, Xennethy, Chester Kwan, and Knox) and professional (examples: Ebolaworld, James Farr, James Lee (The Popstar guy), Tyler Gibb, and Star Wars Gangsta Rap creator Thomas Lee ) alike. I can sense that you had something better planned for this, but that incident involving your laptop prevented you from achieving that. As for the style, I like how you did your own style for this instead of copying off what Jeff did. In other words, a sign of imagination from my viewpoint. Then there is the voice work, which was mostly good except for the female voices which were not up to par with the tankmen. I think a few more takes would have helped in that department. The music selection on the other hand, is laudable and shows that you have the eye of a director as Mindchamber said. As for your attempts at comedy, I laughed a couple times, but this is more towards action than laughter. Please keep in mind that this applies to both parts rather than this one.

What I do like:
-Great art and animation
-Excellent directing
-Funny at parts
-Great music selection
-Mostly great voice acting

What I don't like:
-The ending, while not bad, wasn't fitting for a final Pico Day flash.
-The voices of the two women were rather bad and could have used a few more takes to get right.

Overall: While this isn't up to par with Katan (or anything by Future Squirrel), Combat Instinct: Unregulated (I wish McFretN did more flash like that), The Undead, or all of the Bitey of Brackenwood cartoons; what you have here was still amazing. Here's a ten out of ten for the best goddamn Tankmen fanflash I have seen that isn't from Proxicide.

[Kirby's Kruise]

Pretty good for a first Flash!

Considering that this is another Kirby flash, and one that was probably drawn with a mouse; this turned out to be pretty good. Sure, the graphics were crudely drawn, but they were well-directed and animated. And this happens to be your first Flash cartoon? I think that you have a lot of potential that you managed to tap into, but could use some improvements. One, unless you are doing a ten minute plus flash with thousands of Frames, don't event synchronize music or use scenes (I learned that from Mindchamber). Two, you may want to get some Kirby Super Star sound effects for there wasn't enough of them and the DBZ-charge up will piss off DBZ haters (the site Rainbow Resort has those sounds). Three, you could use some more music for the second part; that is where the audio portal comes in. Other than that, it's pretty good.

What I do like:
-Nice pace
-Passable story
-Decent art, good animation
-Excellent fighting

What I don't like:
-The fact that this is another Kirby flash, which dipshits like Fawx will bemoan all to hell. Note: I don't have a beef with video game flash as long as they are good.
-The background music could have been streamed, and needs more sound effects.

Overall: Here's an eight out of ten, and keep practicing; you will eventually be up there with the likes of Mindchamber, Kine the Genius, Gel, and many others.

[Tankmen:Dual trailer]

I agree with what Ericho and YungJazz have said.

Even though this looks like something that Xennethy would create; this was better directed and animated, even though this is just a trailer. However, for this to live up to the hype, you may want to work on the story unless you want to end up like what John and Richie Zirbes did with Tankmen Infinity: Excellent art and animation, bad voice acting and rushed script. Then there's the song; it may not be Tank Men, but it still fit the movie and that is what matters in the end. Plus, another gripe is the title; unless you are going for wordplay, I think that 'Duel' would be more appropriate.

What I do like:
-Good pace for fight scenes, just like the Stick Slayer and Keegan's Truck Chronicles ep. 1.
-Above-average art and animation
-Fitting music for a trailer

What I don't like:
-You may want to put some thought into the story, so it lives up to the viewer's expectations.
-Not everyone likes J-Pop, but I liked the song you chose.

Overall: Here's a nine out of ten, even though this is a trailer. Now to work on my own Pico Day cartoon.

[FYAT]

Proof that longer doesn't equal better.

As much as I liked Fred-The Animated Series, Kids These Days, and Leo and Satan; This really shows that you keep getting better and better. Not just in terms of laughs, but in the animation department as well. I also like the voice acting too, even though there wasn't much of it. However, as much as I like your attempts at original comedy; you should do something action-packed, dramatic, and intense when you get the chance.

What I like about this:
-Funny
-Good art and animation
-Great soundwork

What I don't like about this:
-People will complain about the length, but who cares about their two bits?

Overall: Oney, how would you like a nine out of ten for this?